Original Short Story :: Neoxian's Post-Apocalyptic Writing Contest

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This is an entry for @neoxian's Prodigious and Desolate Post-Apocalyptic Writing contest.




Title image by @negativer using Canva

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Hmmm, interesting, thank you for entering my contest!

Wow!

Stirring! Disturbing!

"...It’s the system. It’s the way it is...."

AAAAaaaarrrrrrgggggghhhhhh!!!!! :O

And yet, a hopeful ending... :D

Please say "Hey" in a comment below this one so I can vote for this again... :D

😄😇😄

@creatr

A small, terrible sacrifice at the end, but still a hopeful ending. Who knows which small sacrifice is the one that will change the world?

Thanks much for reading!

50% vote delivered as a reward for being the runner up in my contest.

Thank you for another great read... :D

Hi @negativer. I have read this story several times now, but I wanted to find time to write a thoughtful response.

Your writing voice is amazing. And your storytelling ability blows me away. I was so captivated by the way you wove the details together, developed the characters, built the conflict, and brought it to a final devastating conclusion.

This is masterfully done. It paints a picture of what can happen when a few in power control the masses. Yet it is told meaningfully, within the microcosm of a frazzled family unit, where tensions are rising and a fundamental ideological disagreement is at play.

In short, this story is a well-crafted parable, and a stunning illustration of the power of great storytelling.

Ah, it's so encouraging to hear you say something like this, knowing your skillset and how much I enjoy reading your stories as well.

I did want to make a statement about big banks and money without it sounding too preachy, with a small view into how it all affects the innocent.

My thanks for reading and for the uplifting comment, @jayna!

It is well-deserved! 😊

Dang!!! That was deep, very disturbing but also excellently written. So many thoughts were going through my mind as I read about the challenges along their journey. Is this one of the possible futures of crypto currency?
The mark of the beast, no privacy, total control? . . .I need a drink.

There are a couple levels in here, you're right. The possible dark future of crypto, tracking, lack of privacy, banks with ultimate power...it's a scary future if so!

Thanks for reading!

You're gonna blow her hand off with a shotgun?!?

One has to use the tools one has. 😬

Ha! I gotta hand it to you for that one.

Just excellent, @negativer! This could be a movie.

Ooo, I like the sound of that :) Thanks for reading!

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