An unexpected visit | Lola's Story Part 37 | 5 minute freewrite ~ Prompt: quadrillion

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Part 36

“Lola,” Gloria tried again. “I don’t like this. One minute I think you’re doing really well. Ok, that might be an overstatement, but better, then the next you’re quiet and pale just like…well like in the beginning,” she finished firmly. “And I won’t sugar coat this. At this point do you think you might be suffering from depression? Do we need to really look at this more closely?”

“Mom,” Lola started, She took a deep breath. “That envelope had a letter from Kyle in it.”


Part 37

Lola sat on her bed. The soft paper played on her fingertips as she mumbled the letters to herself, then the numbers. She rehearsed it again and again. They had to make sense.

The sun had been down for hours, the starry night shown from her bedroom window. She crawled up to her pillows and unburied Kyle’s t-shirt, and inhaled deeply. It barely smelled like him anymore.

She thought back to her conversation with her mom. How had it gone so wrong?

”Lola, I don’t like that he left a letter behind for you to find,” she said.

Lola had looked at her so confused.

”You need to move forward. Not backwards. Bryon should have known better than to bring that into our home.”

”He hadn’t known what was in it,” Lola said the words stumbling loosely from her lips. “And you can’t honestly believe that I shouldn’t have what he left for me…can you?”

”All I know, is that we are here picking up the pieces daily, and something like that can just ruin everything.”

Lola left immediately. She couldn’t believe that her own mother wouldn’t understand, and it broke her heart that she had been so close to revealing more of the truth.

She sat there now, looking out her window at the quadrillion stars, snuggling the t-shirt close to her chest.

A quiet knocking at her window pane made her jump and scream, but as her eyes focused on the shadows, she saw a figure hunched in the bushes.

“Mark?” she said opening the window. “What are you doing?”

“Sorry to scare you,” he said seriously. “I had this feeling it was too late to come to the door.”

“You have my number,” she said. “Why didn’t you just call?”

His face broke into a smile. “I don’t know,” he laughed under his breath. “Can I come in?”

Lola opened the window all the way. He ducked in and climbed over the sill, and stood awkwardly for a moment.

“You look like you did when you used to sneak into my room,” she laughed at the memory. “That was a long time ago though…” She watched his gaze at it lowered to the dark blue shirt she was holding. “It brings me comfort,” she shrugged.

“Was that Kyle’s?” he asked. She nodded.

“So, why are you here?”

Mark looked from the shirt back to her face, and down to the shirt again.

He took a deep breath, determination crossed over his face, then without another hesitation, he lowered his face to hers. Their lips met, warm and sweet, but Lola stood frozen, clutching the blue cotton in her fist. Warm tingles climbed up her spine, as Mark’s hands moved to hold either side of her face. He held her there for a single breath, then broke away.

Staying only inches from her face, he said. “That. I came for that.”

📃A special note to the readers📃


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Whoa Mark, where did that come from?

Story Club - Everyone's Invited

Are you enjoying @freedomtowrite's story as much as I am? I always find myself wondering where Lola's adventure will take her next and I am curious if you are too. I wanted to invite you to Story Club where we can share our thoughts on each new part and reflect on where the story began. With @freedomtowrite's permission, I will be posing a few questions after each new part in the hopes of sparking some lively discussion. Are you in?

Part 37 Questions

  1. How do you feel about Gloria's reaction to Lola revealing Kyle's letter?

  2. Do you think Mark jumped the gun by kissing Lola? How do you think Lola will react?

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Cheers, Aimee

My thoughts on part 37

  1. How do you feel about Gloria's reaction to Lola revealing Kyle's letter?

    I am a little disappointed with Gloria's reaction. I can understand that she wants Lola to be happy again and sees the reality is that, eventually, Lola will have to move on with her life but I expected more empathy from her, to be honest.

  2. Do you think Mark jumped the gun by kissing Lola? How do you think Lola will react?

    I have such mixed emotions over this kiss! I want Lola to be happy and I believe that Mark whole-heartedly cares for Lola but I just keep questioning the readiness. But, maybe this kiss is exactly what Lola needs to pull her out of her grief, to accept Kyle's loss and start down a road towards happiness again.

Cheers, Aimee

Don't forget to leave your thoughts in the comments below!

Q1: Disappointed too, didn't expect her to react that way at all
Q2: Mmmm... @canadianrenegade I did not think in this direction o. Lol. Well no though

She needed something comforting😁, and Mark came through. She might likely act like nothing happened but of course think about it later.

With all the flirting they've been doing that kiss will surely stay on her mind for a little while. -A

At last he got to the point!

I thought you would say something like that! Thank you for the comment!!

That... was unexpected! Whoah...

I just let it flow, and it was so much fun watching it unfold!

😱😱😱😱😱😱😱😱😱😱😱😱😱
Mark, what has been going through your mind o?

OMG Lola is soooo pretty haha I'm kidding! But when I think about Mark he's very complex, so I'm not entirely sure yet.

WOOOO! That's what I been waiting for. Now I'm jealous. LOL

Hahaha I thought out of everyone you would be the most excited!

She needs a good distraction from the goings on. Well done😎

Mark is an interesting character. Is he going to be Lola's knight in shining armour?

Ahhhh! I don't know yet!

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