Trust | Lola's Story Part 25 | 5 minute freewrite ~ Prompt: paper

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Part 24

“May I?” Mark asked reaching for the paper. He studied it for a moment then agreed. “It’s just like mine. A poorly written poem that's incoherent."

Lola sat on down on her bed and rubbed her forehead. It was true, she thought. She knew Kyle was trying to tell her something, and she was going to find out what it was.


Part 25

Lola traced her fingers against the grooves left in the paper. His handwriting was familiar as his voice had been. She read the lines over and over trying to find some kind of truth in their meaning.

Mark leaned against the dresser across from her, and rubbed his chin scratching his day old whiskers.

"Could you bring your letter to me? Would you mind terribly?" she asked. "Maybe if I just saw the two of them together...maybe it would make more sense," she almost whispered to herself.

Mark looked down at his watch. The evening was starting to slip into view, and he stood there still soaked in his socks, his stomach rumbled noisily.

"If I go home now, I could shower and meet you back here with it." he looked down at her, a thought lost in his eyes. He sighed heavily. "Maybe I could take you to dinner and properly apologize."

Lola searched his face. There was more he wasn't saying, and she could feel it. She wanted to trust him, she knew she needed to.

"Ok," she said. "Come back in an hour, and I'll be ready."

Mark stepped closer to her, arms crossed, a question etched in his face, but something seemed to change his mind, and took a step back.

"Alright, Lola, I will see you in an hour," he said. "Maybe you should do something to warm up too...your lips are blue," he smiled softly, patted her shoulder, and then strode from the room leaving her alone with her thoughts.

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Thank you so much for reading! Please check out the Story Club @canadianrenegade has started in the comment section of the posts! She has some great, engaging questions!

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You tease! You always manage to leave us hanging with more questions than answers! What the heck is Mark hiding and what is going on with Kyle's old partner? Something smells off...

Hahaha I love your reactions! And...I really love writing this.

P.S. I'm waiting for my power to go back up to upvote...it was so slow that it needed a defibrillator!

Can she wear a dress that shows off her tummy?

Really @enginewitty?! There's mysterious things afoot, and you want a pretty dress?? Hahaha

Well ya! They goin out and all, she needs a break😉

Ok...I see your reasoning! Make sure to tune into the next part! And with a significant upvote...the story could find itself leaning certain ways...just sayin'....hahaha 😂

Givin ya what i got, Im tapped out and VP is low...maybe i send something 'cool' your way;)

Haha sounds like a plan!

Aaauugghh! I can't imagine what is going on now! And I can't just turn the page and find out.

Haha I'm so excited to write more! All the characters feel so real in my head so when I dive in to write it's like they come to life! Have you ever read/watched Harry Potter? If you have, it feel like I'm going into a pensieve!

Oddly enough, I've never read any Harry Potter books or watched any of the movies. It never got high enough on my priority list.

I understand! If you ever get a chance definitely try them, but you have to read the books first.

Story Club

Are you enjoying @freedomtowrite's story as much as I am? I always find myself wondering where Lola's adventure will take her next and I am curious if you are too. I wanted to invite you to Story Club where we can share our thoughts on each new part and reflect on where the story began. With @freedomtowrite's permission, I will be posing a few questions after each new part in the hopes of sparking some lively discussion. Are you in?

Part 25 Questions

  1. What do you think Mark might be holding back? Do you think he is withholding information to keep Lola safe or is he keeping her from the truth?

  2. If Kyle's letters are cryptic, do you think he knows Lola could be in danger from someone she holds as trustworthy?

If you've found yourself tagged it's because you're a regular reader,
but if you want to be removed from these question, feel free to let me
know: @freedompoint, @cecicastor, @dreemsteem, @bennettitalia, @thefarmerswife, @thegreatdayne, @scribblingramma, @whatisnew, @quirky.countess, @angelacs, @enginewitty @wordymouth, and @mizdais

Cheers, Aimee

My thoughts on part 25

1. What do you think Mark might be holding back? Do you think he is withholding information to keep Lola safe or is he keeping her from the truth?
I think Marks entrance was conveniently timed, with Bryon's arrival baring the envelope. He appears to have Lola's best interest in mind, but why would he stay out of sight so long and then risk being seen with Lola in a public place after watching her from a distance for so long?I think he wants to solve Kyle's cryptic letters but he doesn't want to share his motivations for doing so with Lola. Whether or not that decision is for the well-being of Lola remains to be seen.

2. If Kyle's letters are cryptic, do you think he knows Lola could be in danger from someone she holds as trustworthy?
I think Kyle was onto something big but knew someone in their inner circle could not longer be trusted. But I still think our trader is yet to be determined. Both Bryon and Mark are acting like they want to take care of Lola but both are still a little too mysterious to be fully trusted. Tread carefully Lola!

Cheers, Aimee

Don't forget to leave your thoughts in the comments below.

Tread carefully Lola!

I love it!

I need to spend a whole day and start from part 1

Yes, please do!

Lol... You should

Nooooooooo ooooo!!!!!!!!! Not another suspense.. Hahahahahaha... What's on Mark's mind ooo? Someone should let the cat out already... Hahahahahaha

Hahaha I'm hoping to write Part 26 today!

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No wonder Mark was mumbling to himself! Cryptic it is...

I can't wait for you to get all caught up!

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