Carnaval Apocalypse - Part 2 - A Not Too Distant Future Scifi Story
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Oh! Love this chapter, it builds up nicely on the first chapter, and we see more of the world's background and how it had gotten to be the way it is...
I really like how you developed the girl and the boy, they both have a very understandable inner voices :) And I also like how you ended the chapter, which leaves the reader hooked to find out what the boy will do in the next chapter :D :D :D
Cool writing, Vincent ! More, please~
Cheers again for your kind words. People like you make Steemit and the world a better place :>)
I have a little less time to write these days but it's comments like these that motivate me to continue working on this story.
Bye for now!
Still hate italic dialogue 🤣 also you switched tense halfway 🙃
Could totally feel both the paranoid people’s fear/concern and the bravado of the two young’uns 😆 and the general excitement that would be rippling through the crowd watching them march towards the cloud.
Guess we’ll find out next episode what’s in the cloud or if they get stopped 😆
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Anything to scare off perfectionists and get rid of my own perfectionism.
Glad to hear that you can feel the feelings though.
The only thing I know about what's in the cloud is that it's not stored on our computers ;>)
xx
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