5 Minute Freewrite (Poetry) - Twilight Loss
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So enticing and sad. Glad to see you freewriting, my friend. I hope you are well. !tip
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Not great health-wise.... but what's changed there eh? 😆 If ya didn't laugh, you'd cry. I know you know hun. I read your recent post about your migraines. I'm still in the position where food makes me sick and tired instead of nourished and energized.
Thanks for checking out my poem :-)
@raj808,
I missed this post by a day so I'll hit a comment instead.
Pretty good for a 5 minute freewrite, mate. Well done.
I've been toying with writing a book as well, including Fantasy (my daughter and all her friends devour the genre). The trick with all fiction is "plausibility" ... fiction DOES NOT grant an author license to write baloney, a fact I find many writers do not comprehend. And given the nature of Fantasy, it is especially prone to plotline abuse.
Keep it Real ... even when it's not.
Quill
Ha ha, I always keep it real... especially when keeping it unreal ;-)
Yeah, I get what you're saying. I think it is highly subjective with fantasy in regards to things like magic systems, religions and monsters etc. Tbh, if you're not a fan of balony, I'm not sure why you'd read fantasy. By the genres very nature it isn't meant to be realistic, but having said that, the rules of writing still apply. For example, with fantasy, part of the skill and craft is building believable unreality. This is achieved by making sure there is some type of internal logic, and system, behind the fantastic elements (e.g. magic). Also, building a rich world (sub-creation) before starting to write the novel. I have over 40000 words of sub-creation already written, including maps, political make up, history, legends, religions, magic system and unique races that live in the world I've created.
On top of that any decent fantasy novel also has to have the core elements right just like any other novel. Plot, theme, structure, pace, strong believable characters (and interactions between characters), hooks between chapters, drama, twists and turns to keep the reader interested.
I do agree that fantasy is prone to lazy writing and I've read some novels that I thought were truly awful in the fantasy genre. The type of novels that make you scratch your head as to how they got published, as you give up a quarter of the way through because it's just that hard to read. It kind of encourages me even more to write a unique take on fantasy, and pay homage to my first love in genre fiction.
Cheers for checking out the poem Quill :)
I'm sorry to hear about your health struggles and certainly empathize. I am praying for healing for you. Go gently on yourself, my friend.
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Very beautiful poem! Your word choice paints such a clear picture of the night and through them I can feel the emotions. Funny you mention an unfinished fantasy fiction novel trilogy...because I was just about to tell you about mine over on your recent comment. Writing for this genre is very difficult...and I have been working on bringing my own ideas to the page for the better part of ten years! When your mind naturally settles into expressions of prose and passages heavy on the description...works of high fantasy and science fiction turn out extremely well. World building and character building are probably two of the most important aspects when it comes to writing any sort of novel...but with fantasy there are lots of extras to keep on track. Such as the lore and origins and backstory and generally the 'rules of the place' such as how the characters interact with possible new laws of physics and making sure this works seamlessly between each volume. Anyway...keep us updated on the progress of your novel and feel free to bounce any ideas off me for feedback. Sometimes internalizing everything makes this sort of vacuum that makes it difficult to see and sort out important details down the road. Looking forward to checking out those links!
Thank you @creativesoul, appreciate the positive feedback hun :) Everything you say about fantasy sub-creation is true. I studied creative writing in university and actually took one of my elective modules in fantasy fiction lol. It was an awesome lecture series to participate in as, along with more traditional writing exercises and world building/map work, we did stuff like weapons combat for screen and guided meditations for finding inner landscape.
Absolutely right. I am lucky that I have already written over 40000 words of sub-creation for the world I plan to write in, including political make up, history, legends, religions, magic system and unique races that live in the three kingdoms. I have done a local (to the part of the world where the story will be set) map and am half way through a full global world map.
It is one hell of an undertaking and, I believe, the only way to create a worthwhile fantasy work is to completely immerse yourself in the world you create. This is why steem isn't the best for me... it causes a huge pull on my nature to procrastinate and distracts me.
Anyway, thanks for the offer for feedback, but what is most likely is that I'll simply become more active on steem in 6-12 months promoting the book. I'm very focused on getting this written, drafted and to a literary agent that specializes in fantasy. We shall see ;-)
P.s. the best out of those links is 'The Gelded One'. That short story was chosen for publication in an anthology over a year ago, but unfortunately the funding for anthology fell through.
https://steemit.com/fiction/@raj808/the-gelded-one-fantasy-fiction
Raj, great to see you back with a freewrite poem! Love the image you include with it and, as always, I love the words. And how exciting that you're working on more fantasy fiction! Good for you but sad for us that As I get deeper into the process of writing this novel, I may disappear from steem for a time. We'll be here keeping a chair warm for you at the table!
Hi Carol :-)
I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem... it came from a place of deep loss. It's hard sometimes to open yourself up like that in writing, but that's the beauty of the 5 min freewrite for me. Often good stuff comes out through the whole process of not editing, either psychologically or stylistically. Lol, although this poem did undergo an extra 5 minutes of me tightening up the verse structure and checking the punctuation ;-)
Yeah, writing a full fantasy trilogy is one hell of an undertaking and, I believe, the only way to create a worthwhile fantasy work is to completely immerse yourself in the world you create. I am lucky that I have already written over 40000 words of sub-creation for the world I plan to write in, including political make up, history, legends, religions, magic system and unique races that live in the three kingdoms. I have done a local (to the part of the world where the story will be set) map and am half way through a full global world map. But I'm afraid steem isn't the best for me as a writer with a plan to write a novel... it causes a huge pull on my nature to procrastinate and distracts me. I'm not really very good at holding my focus, so my best option is to leave myself no choice but to disappear into that sub-creation while I write and stay away from anything that distracts me.
Much like the terminator.... I'll be back.... eventually.... to promote the book 😆
You are wise!
"I'm afraid steem isn't the best for me as a writer with a plan to write a novel... it causes a huge pull on my nature to procrastinate and distracts me. I'm not really very good at holding my focus, so my best option is to leave myself no choice but to disappear into that sub-creation while I write and stay away from anything that distracts me. Much like the terminator.... I'll be back."
I've allowed Steemit to consume too much of my time - busy work, reading-commenting-upvoting-resteeming-TwitterSharing. If you need a beta reader, though, you know I'm here! Good Luck!!
Well I will very much look forward to reading your fantasy novels as I am sure in time you will put the pen to paper (at lease proverbially 😉). Good luck flexing those muscles to get ready for the big attempt!
Thank you @plantstoplanks I'm actually looking forward to the initial writing of the first draft. I've written half of a novel before now and when you allow yourself to get drawn into the story and really inhabit it it's quite a magical experience.
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It took me a while to recover from this poem. The opening lines are gorgeous. The refrain, that tart steaming in the window, is a great image and a reminder of our expectations of being alive long enough to eat it (my motto: eat desert first, because you never know when a comet might take us out like the dinosaurs). Does anyone cool pies in windowsills anymore? Yes, I'm running off on tangents, trying not to think about the child taken by the pox and the final lines. You break my heart, Raj. But you do it so beautifully.
Ha ha, I don't think it's something you'd see anymore but the character of the mother in that poem is kinda meant to be set in the fantasy world I'm creating. I'm hoping to take that poem and insert it (all be it re-written) somewhere in first of the trilogy.
Yeah, I wanted it to be the crux, or literary device, that really brings the tragedy that this woman is feeling home. All the other imagery is about her either feeling lost or wanting to end the suffering. I feel like the counterpoint of the pie, something that is a pleasure of life, with the stark reality of her situation really drives it home.
Lol, it was a lively and upbeat poem ;-)
You did convey the profound sense of loss - beautifully, memorably!
I was just feeling kind of old, with the pie-in-the-window image from yesteryear. Something about that image is so rich, connoting so much, and yet it seems that we who remember pies cooling in windows are dying off, and it's the end of an era. You're right about the freedom of the 5-minute freewrite to uncork things we've held inside. Let them out. Let the words flow. You're a pro at it!
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