Finish the Fiction Story Contest - Week #20

in #poetsunited6 years ago

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Black Star

And finally dawn came, mercilessly, to reveal the blasphemous massacre of that night. The sulphur smell of the Flaegreian fields was mixed with that of the blood and entrails, while clots of death, horribly coagulated one with the other, slowly melted inside the iridescent pools of acid water. There was no honour of weapons for the vanquished, whose remains were hideously smeared on the battlefield.

Instead, something else was crawling in that silent scene: the unnatural profanity of a rape, far beyond the concept of victory of one army over the other. It was as if the ground, pierced by fumaroles and teeming with mutilated bodies, wanted to shout to the sky a silent cry of faltering horror.

From the piles of corrupt meat, a black pillar emerged in the middle of the plain. An invisible and incandescent flame was emanating from that dark mountain, making the landscape all around tremulous due to the intense heat.

"I brought you some wine, Xarag." The man in armour approached cautiously to the black and immobile human tower.

"I do not find it right that you have to stay still for all this time instead of celebrating ..".

"Tell me you did not come alone just with that nauseating spicy wine." Glaring through the black metal of the helmet, the paladin abruptly interrupted the officer.

"I also have the serum, Xarag. Our queen never forgets the needs of her most valiant servants"

"Oh yes, she's always so thoughtful". The sudden pain obliged the paladin to an added effort for emitting the last word, which barely came out through the bloody clenched teeth.

"Do not worry, I cannot figure out how much you suffer, Xarag, and I won’t even dare to, but I promise you that also this time, when it has cooled down, we will manage to get you out of the gift".

"The gift, of course, guard of the queen. I know you'll do a good job with that piece of meat that still sticks to my bones," the black tower murmured in a metal hiss. "Now pour the whey into the wine and then leave me. You, at least, go and celebrate."

Xarag, the Black Star, barely approached the chalice at the deformed hole of the helmet and drank avidly. His meats, slowly devoured by his own armour, produced sounds that he would never get used to. He wanted to look up from that vision of death, he wanted to look for a star in the sky, among the poisonous and sulphur fumes, but the steel colour of the abyss no longer allowed it by many battles. He wanted to think to her, if only he didn’t have to bleed for the effort of not being torn apart in his body, mind and soul at the same time. For him, the battle would have still continued in solitude for long hours.

The fires projected cheerful arabesques on the cobalt walls of the camp tents, where the unrestrained bacchanal of victory was taking place. A group of officers argued in the galley tent, away from the crowds.

"I told you they did not fight! The angel approached, and they just looked at each other for a very long time ... at least that's what I saw as long as I could," said the young man with shelled eyes to the rest of the group.

"If only I could fight one of those damned celestials simply by standing by... Maybe even while scratching my balls.” The silly laugh of the inexperienced official interrupted in a strangled sob.

"Listen to me well, piece of dung. Just because you miraculously survived your first battle and you got good marks at the academy, do you think you gained the right to talk about the Black Star?" The veteran's arm had relentlessly triggered at the young man's throat with a ruthless grip.

"First of all, that was not just an angel, but it was one of the Powers, sent into battle directly from the third triad. Have you already forgotten the lessons on the enemy hierarchy, cutie?" The grip loosened just before the colour of the young officer passed from red to dark purple.

"Also," continued the veteran, "you can bet they were fighting, as the Power had managed to overtake the first two auras of Xarag's armour and was now attempting to force the third inner one: the disintegration of the essence."

The senior officer would have continued but was interrupted by a loud disturbing roar. The immediate shock-wave overwhelmed those present and all the contents of the tent. Perhaps the battle was not completely over.

My Entry:

From the primordial depths of the Flaegreian Fields, through molten lava, and the heat of a thousand hells, roared the beast as a boast to the paladin; a true challenger to the good Samaritan.

Tectonic plates could not cage this raging monster of hate that only wished pain on others. It burst through the surface of the Earth, corpses flying everywhere. Its feet landing on the ground like an Earthquake. A dragon with leathery wings, claws clicking, as its tongue sniffed the air for fear from the Black Star.

Xarag, the Black Star, drew his sword. He stood in a defensive pose. Ready for battle. Ready for death. The serum from the Queen eating the meat on his bones. Dying from within. He need not worry about survival.

They began to pace around in a circle like heavy weight fighters, looking for weaknesses, and waiting for a moment to engage in a life and death struggle for supremacy on the planet.

Just then the men from camp made it to a low hill on the battlefield.

“What in the hell is that thing?” Asked the inexperienced official.

Black Star and the Dragon both looked his way. The Dragon gave out a breath of fire that set the stupid man ablaze. He began to scream, and as he did the Veteran began yelling at him.

“You fucking dumb ass! I told you not to talk shit! Serves you right you fucking little bastard! Burn baby burn, think about this when you’re in hell with Satan getting punished for a worthless life lived. I hope you think of me as you suffer in pain. I hope as you bleed out in a thousand lashes your dying memories think back to me grabbing you by the throat and schooling you on not to talk about Black Star. How dare you. You little punk right out of the academy! You really thought you could be a soldier!”

The young man continued to burn. The rest of the men stared at the Veteran who continued to yell out insults as he frothed at the mouth, eyes bulging, and veins sticking out on his neck.

Until the Black Star finally said, “that’s a little harsh Veteran guy. I think that kid’s dead or something.”

The Dragon stood holding its mouth and shaking its head in disbelief of human cruelty.

“What the fuck? How can we fight for good when people like you are so mean Veteran dude? Like I’m a young officer, and look up to someone like you as a battle tested older person. And you’re just fucking mean man. I mean seriously.”

At that moment the Dragon flew away. The soldiers began to walk back to their tent while the Veteran followed trying to defend his actions through explanation.

The Black Star once again stood alone on the battlefield thinking that the Queen had given him laxative and wished he could find a bathroom.

Thank you,
Cyrus Emerson

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Pretty funny. You should keep that going.

The Black Star once again stood alone on the battlefield thinking that the Queen had given him laxative and wished he could find a bathroom.

That was the mystical reason for his standstill!! 😂
I donnow how you managed to turn this into a comedy but you did it, and it was hilarious.

Ahahahha with such a serious first start I did not expect the 2nd part to be funny!

The Black Star once again stood alone on the battlefield thinking that the Queen had given him laxative and wished he could find a bathroom.

This here is comedic gold!!


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Haha. Gold plated toliet seat.

You did the unexpected! You turned the epic tragedy in a comedy!
Also, I discover form your song link that Xarag is a place in China, lol!

That's how I found this video. Looking up Xarag. Sometimes wonder if these stories are based off European pop culture. This video has Xarag in the title.

ROFL!

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Thanks! My biggest Upvote on Steemit ever!

I never expected a comedy, but man, this turned out to be very funny :D

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