Looking Back at the Past - An Original Rhyme by Another Poet

in #rhyme6 years ago (edited)

If looking back at the past we could say we've done more good than bad I'd say we're on the right track...

Funny those that seem to have the most tend to walk the middle path...

What's the middle path you ask?

Sometimes were flush and sometimes were bust...

When were up it never seems enough and when were down it feels we may never find the stuff to get us back up again...

But life goes on regardless of the sentiment.

So let this be a testament and point out the prevelances of a prevailing attitude a selfless act could be the key to a new altitude...

The highs and lows of life are better managed by benevolent souls...

With good intentions in mind the oceans of time in which this story unfolds will play the song that we make just like the rippling waves that crash upon the shore.

Author's Notes

This is a short verse I wrote in collaboration for a friend's album. Always interested in knowing my reader's thoughts and opinions so if you liked it or didn't like it, I'd love to hear your opinion either way!

Thanks,
Another Poet

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You have good, noble sentiments here. But for this to rise to the level of poetry and possibly be published in a publication outside Steemit, you must pay closer attention to your punctuation and polish language.

I invite you to visit my page and see some of the poems I have posted. Wishing you success, Yahia @anotherpoet

I've been published by amazon music and itunes... what other publications are you referring to? Appreciate your thoughts about punctuation. I'll accept feedback graciously when given the opportunity.

I fucking love the collaboration of text with image. From the start your potential to convey your content was so high. Great read. - G

super articale very nice post photography was so super i like it,

There will be highs and lows in our life. We have to go through the process.

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"When were up it never seems enough and when were down it feels we may never find the stuff to get us back up again..."
How true is that.
This is your second article I read, and loved both. Wait lemme follow you😂
Any link to the entire collaboration? Or are we supposed to wait for the next edition?😅

Nice post for us

nice post have a great day.

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Really enjoy the content of your songwriting. Keep it coming!

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