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RE: Poetry Please - Spring Awakening (Original Poetry & Short Film)
The way you use words is more than amazing, I mean, there was an outburst of rhythms and your assonance and play of words is extraordinary,needless to say, your ability to create the perfect natural imagery is the biggest strength of this work really, it's freaking outstanding really, awesome piece Buddy.
Ditto that! Also, lots of paradox or things that make us think. E.g., the harsh guffaw summoning the dawn is the caw of the penitent crow? Or were these two separate entities? Penitent yet harsh. I love it that the wetland emerges from sleep Awakened by tremulous cheeps and that spring is exhaled by trees. What an imagination! It reminds me of all that I love about paganism, and I mean this in a good way, but I don't know how to articulate it. Maybe an anthropomorphic view of nature. How lively and alive the world is in the spring you describe so well!
I.e., ditto "an outburst of rhythms," assonance, an extraordinary play of words, and "your ability to create the perfect natural imagery" - once I hit "post" the comment got separated from the one I was ditto-ing. :)
Yes yes yes, Carol... you have really hit the nail on the head here! If I had a religious bone in my body, it would probably be a pagan one. The idea of animism
the attribution of a living soul to plants, inanimate objects, and natural phenomena.Runs deep in my psyche and it comes out in much of my poetry. The anthropomorphic view of nature as you describe it, the feeling I get when observing nature is that their is spirit (anima) infused into all. I don't get this feeling in the city, it's almost like there is a man made muffler obscuring my view. Sometimes I wish I lived in the countryside 🙂
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Animism - ding! ding! ding! - the word I was after. 🙂 Animism is the religious belief that objects, places and creatures all possess a distinct spiritual essence. Potentially, animism perceives all things—animals, plants, rocks, rivers, weather systems, human handiwork and perhaps even words—as animated and alive. Wikipedia
The city's "man-made muffler" - you're poetic even in converation! I'm in the opposite situation: surrounded by nature, seven acres on the edge of loneliness, not enough time in cities. Maybe you can rent a car for weekend drives to the wilderness of England. (Bring GPS!)
Wow... all of your messages have made me realize that I'm in a conversation with someone who really knows their theology Carol. Lol, I'm woefully inadequate in these types of issues. All I know is what I feel and I guess it's closest to what I described as animism 🙂
I'd love to get out in the country but my current situation makes getting a car impossible. I can get on my bike though and jump on the 'ferry cross the mersey' and ride to the nearest countryside area called 'the Wirral'. So it's not all doom and gloom 😂
I can get on my bike though and jump on the 'ferry cross the mersey' and ride to the nearest countryside area called 'the Wirral'. - that sounds cool!
LOL - I don't know much theology, but I do know Lord Google. 😂
Aha. Immanence (not imminence) is another word I had in mind, along with Pantheism. Pantheists agree that deity is immanent, and permeates the universe and that deity may be permanently beyond our ability to perceive and conceptualize. (I think pantheist is what I am until an "en" is inserted into the word: Panentheists assert that Deity is immanent; it "is an inner Presence and Power that permeates, saturates, or infuses the universe and everything in it (including the world and humanity, nature and human nature) from within." Unlike pantheists, panentheists assert that Deity is also transcendent.
Theists generally believe that deity suspends the laws of nature from time to time in order to generate miracles. http://www.religioustolerance.org/tran_imm.htm
This! The source of so much cognitive dissonance from the time I first learned to read!
Deists add infinite attributes to deity, i.e. omniscience, omnipotence, omnipresent, and all-loving, but this leads to the paradox of theodicy: how can an all-good, omnipotent deity tolerate the presence of evil and suffering?
P.s. to answer your question, yes it was like a clarification. 😉
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Thanks for your kind words buddy. I spent so long on this today lol
The poem was completely rewritten, and then making the little film and reading... let's just say I ended up drinking two pints of coffee.
Yeah, natural scenes and themes are my strength in poetry for sure. nature is the place where images flow for me and the poet-tree grows 😂
I can never be good as you, hahahaha when it comes to creating from the filming to the editing and the swaggering accent you used here lol, I'd say It is more than a brilliant poem, I don't know why it didn't get a dtube upvote I'm perturbed
Cheers m8. The editing takes a while to learn but it's satisfying when it all comes together.
You and me both. Maybe I'll wake up to a nice surprise, but I'm not holding my breath.
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