This is an interesting approach to the story. I'm really glad that you're writing with us, given your capability of immersing the reader in a natural setting with well-crafted dialogue and an insightful third-person omniscient pov. I wouldn't add that comment in the end as it's a narrative element. If you feel that as a possible character's interpretation, then you should find a way to hint at that inside the story or else just leave it to the imaginary of the reader. Well done and keep it up!