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RE: Mental burnout, leave note at door

in #finishthestory5 years ago

Trademark Felix, happily swinging the story around to another perspective! You deliver up the point of the fallacy in gender assumption while crafting a well flowing story left open to possibility. 'Bugger' and 'kerel' (#moreinternetdictionaryloveforthisone), though heavily utilized in reference to males, aren't strictly confined to such defining.

Your descriptions provide the reader with a scope to the setting as the cane thumps to and from the door help one to visualize the room. Also to the point that the writer of the email uses a cane, one can speculate if it is due to a previous injury or an ailment.

just like how American pie is American

Again, assumptions (those pesky things) of the email's contents legitimacy without the benefit of fact. (Side note, this line had me thinking of pie closets and how funny it would be if the secret to Dankworth's code was hidden within one owned by 'Ms. Dankworth'. See what you do to me? 😄)

Fun with names (ie: Galluna 😉), another trait to your writings, plays within your story as well. 'Begriff-Val-Ignatius' - 'Begriff' (d. an idea/concept) which is not only remembered from one of your earlier co-writes; Val (d. choice) from the Iron Valluna teaming; Ignatius (d. inferno/fired-up). This also allows more of a peak at the 'you' within the writing to come through as you are one who's brimming with ideas that you're fired up to express. 🤗

Kudos for the most affectionate tone in a letter of direction and notification of final assignment, by the way.

~Bris

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UwU ~ Thanks for reading and thanks for the compliments! And I love swinging perspective like its candy, y'all!!!!~ And this time this was easy pickings to go all out on their identities with no fear for any action to be necessarily worried about. And yes, those two words are just lovely aren't they?~

Sounds are everything and can truly make and break entire entries, plus easy time to help establish an area with no worries of any meaningful shift in place. So had fun with developing the character as well to even include small details of Ms. Kent~

Assumptions the main game of the entry here! (Side note, gonna keep that a secret like how the krabby patty formula has been a secret for a while.)

Names! Names everywhere! Also word combos whenever I can slip are truly a treat for me and the reader as well. Good analysis as always~

(Kudos for having a good eye on details like that~)

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