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RE: The Extraordinary Café - Finish The Story #48

in #finishthestory5 years ago

The scene is crafted with care. I appreciated the many details that contribute to making it vivid together with the characters' gestures, skillfully speaking about their mood. Indeed a fine writing technique, from which someone can learn and get inspired. The end comes naturally and melancholy mixes with the sense of discovery.

as he looked at the younger version of his wife

I would simply cut this. Try to read it without that sentence and tell me.

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Yeah I agree, this is so well put together it doesn't need the explicit line <3

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