I hope you don't mind if I offer some suggestions. This isn't a criticism but it would make it easier to read. The first is to watch the letter case on your words. You call him fatso but also Fatso. You call the village ogudada. Is it normal to write it ogudada or Ogudada?

The second thing is the font.

I realize now that you wrote that section parenthetically. In that case, you wouldn't reduce the size of the font. When you write parenthetically (like the text within these parenthesis), it allows the reader to ignore that section. It shouldn't be important information.