For someone who does not write fiction often this is great work. It would be great even for those who write often and think highly of their craft.
I was genuinely caught in the plot. Like the boy seeing himself from the rabbit's eyes. That scene was superb.
Great work. Please, keep writing.
Even if fragmented, you have quite amazing stories to be told and there is an audience for them.
What is life, after all, but a bunch of fragments we all try to make sense of.