Making pictures to go on shirts, etc

kyu10 (46)in #japanese • 6 years ago (edited)

So, I started a Redbubble account a few years ago and I am finally getting around to improving the content in there.

Much of my work seemed like it didn't work on shirts and other goods, so I decided to make some art pieces that worked on clothing better.
(You can check my work here https://www.redbubble.com/portfolio/manage_works?ref=account-nav-dropdown)

But I am wondering, what do you think? Does it look good to you, or could I improve on something?

ra,unisex_hoodie_womens,x2000,oatmeal_heather,front-c,310,140,750,1000-bg,f8f8f8.u1.jpg

rco,womens_premium_t_shirt,womens,x1000,fafafa_ca443f4786,lifestyle-c,0,0,750,1000-bg,f8f8f8.lite-3u3u1.jpg

rco,mens_premium_t_shirt,mens,x1000,fafafa_ca443f4786,packaging-bg,f8f8f8.lite-3u3u1.jpg

Anyway, back to the picture.
I wanted to have a saying in Japanese "接続が悪いよ" (Setsuzoku ga warui yo), but I wanted to have people be able to look at the picture and understand the meaning even if they couldn't read Japanese.
Can you understand the meaning without looking up the meaning?
What do you think of this picture as a shirt design?
raf,750x1000,075,t,oatmeal_heather.u1.jpg