It Takes Skill
Mouth full
eyes water
tongue is working
harder and harder
slide up and down
your nice hard shaft
taste your pre-cum
know you won’t last
you’ve grown in size
so so much
I feel those veins
you’re ready to bust
now it’s time
hold it steady
you moan and grunt
you’re almost ready
And here it comes
I choke down
was that a new record?
I deserve a crown!
Pearly Jewels
I’m the Oral Queen
Now it’s your turn
to prove yourself King!
Get on your knees,
you little slut
tongue out
lick my clit up
nice and steady
there you go
add a finger
and I’m ready to blow!
Delightfully naughty! Expertly picked picture too. I had to scroll, and scroll and scroll while the popsicle stretched longer and longer. Well done! Then the raw poem!
I really enjoyed this stanza:
In particular it was the line, "so so much" Not often are double words effective. They can come across like errors, or bleh, but here, here they were powerful. I was reminded of the ever-scrolling image and the grown size "so so much." It makes you want to just marvel at the sheer weight of the growing thing in front of you.
I also liked the turn at the end where after finishing, the speaker gets their own treat eaten. Although, "slut" and "up" didn't ring great as rhymes for me.
I think the poem should end with,
To me the last stanza didn't add the humor, sensation, or the shock value the rest of the poem did.
Thank you for sharing!
I'm glad you liked that lollipop image, when I saw how big it was I knew it was the one! You're definitely right about the last stanza, it does seem disjointed. Thanks for the feedback!
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