SMOKE & PEBBLES {An Original Poetry} Day 94

in #poetry6 years ago

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I looked into our empire,
and it was ember and char.
like spilled spirit on drunk floors
It was like a forgotten world
Apocalyptic, encrypted With painful musing,
a deserted Eden, bereaved of affection.

Memories have hibernated,
darkened and trodden, like rusted metals to the ground.
a quest to find, never found,
We built a garden for buddings if emotions
to nurture, blossom into beautiful petals
but we're victims of cardiac injuries,
betrothed to die of lonesomeness

We are but smokes and peebles
rotten dungs and dead bettles
a flourishing fountain, now desolate,
Our hearts were like fluorescence in past prescence.
yet we're living a pitiful future,
broken lies, and numerous seizures

A tear is but a truck coming down the eyes
like a train furiously falling on a track,
we pilled our memories up this rack,
and let our mind enjoy blissful amnesia
to forget the smokes and pebbles
Our lives has suddenly become.


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POETIC NOTES & ANALYSIS


This poem speaks of a past that's seems quite forgettable, and he painted this using imageries hyperboles and sarcasm. Smokes and peebles signifies a forgotten wasteland which the poet tries to envisage by comparing a particular experience which was quite beautiful into something non-existent.
The poet bemoan the memories of how his love life use to be and compares it to the pain which he seems to endure now. He calls it an empire which has become char, he paints a memory of destruction of an emotional love experience.

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Written, edited & analysed

By @Josediccus

30/5/2018


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Forgetting is a hard process. I like how you describe the past and memories and the feeling that comes with remembering and forgetting.

Thank you so much my friend.

Kind of sad but emotions are very powerful beyond words!

Thank you so much

Are poetic notes and analysis needed? Is poem not kind of public property when it comes to interpretation once poem is released?

I do poetic analysis when I want to pass an interpretation to my audience

Ok. My intuition is that, audience tend to circumvent original interpetation, at least in part. In some respects, every experience is different, right?

But, taking it away, very powerful poem, indeed.

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