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RE: Pizzachain Poems -- Suffer

in #poetry6 years ago

This is pretty good, my colleague. Given that in your closing stanza, the speaker distances himself as far as opinion and blame worthiness go, I'd have posed the second stanzas as questions, like this ..

are we doomed to..

There are some minor issues to tighten up. If you wish, I'll post you a txt file with those in poetsunited, Sunday afternoon (UTC)

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