"A jazz hit"(but hit as blow or stroke) sounds like a very good title to me, @zentalk. The image is very suggestive, for jazz itself as music; but it could also lead us to Mallarmé's "coup de dés", because there is a lot of chance in the lyrics of your song, and also the blow of the judge's hammer, not to mention the "blows in life", as the poet César Vallejo said. I agree with other comments that it would be interesting to know the musical version. I am also a jazz lover. Thank you. Greetings.