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RE: ADSactly Contest - SteemShort #3 - Post 4: Request for an Illustration and the Title of the Story
i always read your steemshorts post sir, but sad to say when i read deep english words it will lost on my mind right away :(
need to practice more about english
Yeah @bien..... perhaps some more practice will do. I read it to the end and i can say it isn't complex in construction and cadence. It was a beautiful read.
i had to read it to the end. Such a great write up. will have to stick more to reading from you, Great Job
@bien, i was just like that years back but i decided to stick to learning by consulting dictionary as fast as possible and this breaks the deep words down for me to what i can relate with easily. you should give it a trial
i better buy thag dictionary,i should try friend. thank you
This story is expertly written. Simple construction. @bien you are right to feel that way, but i think being immersed in a story goes beyond grammar sometimes, but choosing to enjoy it. When that is your focus, and more so reading your favorite authors, you'll see words you thought are big decompose and connects themselves in a shapely fashion.
indeed,thank you for your kind words sir,and encouragement i really appreciate it :)
The plot was great, and I was personally moved by the weight of the story's emotion. However, you should be careful when conveying whether or not something was expertly written to someone whose first language isn't English. The story itself needs much editing in terms of punctuation and grammar. Yes, you are right that being immersed in a story goes beyond technicalities surrounding grammar. However, it is exceedingly difficult to become immersed in a story that isn't clear about who the subject is due to lack of proper transitions.
I am a writer myself and speak very fluid English, but even I found myself having to reread a few of the paragraphs above just because I couldn't automatically tell who was speaking at certain points. It must have been even more difficult for those who aren't fluent in English.
Is the story good? Yes, I think it was great actually. Is it expertly written? Not likely, but all writing improves with time and diligence. I'm looking forward to seeing how this author grows!