Oh man, I loved the part with the notebook so much - that pulled delay as she goes to hand it over, and he looses a whole week - that addled my brain brilliantly! You have a real skill with storytelling as a tale like this could so easily loose the reader- especially as the MC is so lost all the way through- but this was excellent, I was there with him all the way through, feeling his confusion and enjoying his rather dry sense of humour.

Really excellent writing- I look forward to more!
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