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RE: Day 714: 5 Minute Freewrite: Friday - Prompt: law and order
As usual, I enjoyed your writing style. There are a special flow and rhythm in your writing. It's like a wave.
For me, it's a little hard to understand what went on. I gather Frat Boys were the guys from a gang who robbed the church. If so why did Captain Li stated that chasing Frat Boys was not worth police time?
“If y'all would spend more time enforcing good law and order on the populations that most need it instead of chasing down frat boys who were just having a little fun last week, I think Big Loft would be better off.”
The citizen of Big Loft who eased up to Captain Lee said that ... that citizen would have heard about the frat boy bust in the news, and, as Captain Lee said, that citizen apparently identified with them... which is why Captain Lee let him have it in no uncertain terms...
Your writing is beautiful. The way you construct phrases is unusual and for a non native speaker like myself it is not easy to understand.
I read many scientific papers in programming, dynamics, psychology. They had many unfamiliar words, but once you've learned them, you can follow the articles with relative ease.
In your writing, I know all the words but it's like I am reading something written in another language. Is that what is referred to as "Southern droll"?
Yep, that is the famous Southern drawl... two variations of it. You have the common citizen version and you have the higher-class version spoken by Captain Lee, since I have grafted him into a family that LITERALLY has been high-class in the English-speaking world since the time of Richard the Lionhearted (so, around 1,000 years!).
Here's the other thing about the Southern drawl ... it is SLOW, so read it again, and imagine the citizen coming up saying what he said slowly, giving time for Captain Lee's fury to go absolutely through the roof, and THEN imagine Captain Lee picking out each and uttering every devastating word even more slowly, just melting the bigot down over a slow, high heat...
Thank you. I will have to try.
Although, Richard the Lionhearted, being of French descent, probably didn't speak English very well. More so in his entire life, he spent in the British Isle not more than a year. )))
True ... all I'm saying is that the Leas, later known as the Lees, were speaking whatever variation of English there was all the way back then...
Got it, got it. Way before Shakespeare. What a monumental task you've mounted before me... )))
Just kidding. I think I will get used to it eventually. Thank you!