You've got a nice piece @cryptochato but I suggest you work on your paragraphing and get it right, it makes reading easier and more interesting. Then do a recheck on your spellings to be sure you got every word right. Nice story you've got and we're waiting to read more of it. Don't be discouraged by anything to write, keep writing and watch it create an impact in the mind of your readers. And also, give reference to your images if they're not yours. Thanks and Cheers!