RE: Pointy Eyes Shine In The Dark (Finish the Story #52 Entry)
What a terrific story you've given us as your first FTS entry! We hope to be able to read more from you. 😎
It was engaging with a great flow and you tied in so many important details. Building out from the beginning, you deepened the ties between Dr. Machete and Kurt, gave us the horror of exactly how he achieved his baritone as well as answered the mystery of why his voice was failing him.
She had large saggy breasts like bagpipes.”
This line cracked me up. Of course Kurt would remember something like that.
Though Masha's rituals scared him, to achieve his desires he was willing to do anything. Turns out that 'anything' came with one Hell of a price. Your reveal of his therapist being so much more than just so was perfectly placed, explaining the man's calm acceptance of Kurt's sacrifices and giving us a thoroughly great ending.
Welcome to the contest and congratulations to you for receiving a vote from the Curie community!
~Bris
Thank you for the comment, and also for the contest.
The Curie vote made me feel a bit like Kurt must have felt, instant success, though i swear i didn't do anything,or....
For one naive moment i thought the thousand + number meant actual readers, well.
I'll just have to work harder to get all the peoples balls, eyeballs that is, focused on my posts. For that is what I'm interested in, more than anything, for how am I to spread my misery when contained, I need to get airborne and soar :)