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RE: More Precious Than A Green Stone (Finish The Story - Not Entry)
I really, really liked this entry!
But I'm going to confess to being just as lost as the "detective." The shadow and light seemed an obvious reference to their complexions/hair, but was there some other meaning beneath that?
What is Belinda trying to entice him into exactly? What is it Belinda knows and intends that the protagonist misinterprets? If you don't mind spoiling the mystery, I'm very curious.
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Awww yes! Thank you so much, this has made me so happy <3
Okay okay, I went for a really far stretch on the clues, wanted to see how far I could push it ;) so spoilers in small. I will sort of decode the clues, so you can see if you get to it before i tell you the real ending ;)
This bit about not being able to sleep, both refers to having spent the night with him, and is her saying she knows he's a hitman, too familiar with the threat to sleep soundly.
The awakening is what he is yet to realise, and the line about chasing the mouse is her trying to say it isn't safe to catch her yet because he hasn't freed his mind enough to figure out whats really going on.
You got the shadow and the light, they are in a situation where if they don't work together, they both cannot 'be'
Garden can be slang for lady parts, so she is using it to refer to that moment of connection when she spent the night with him. The scent is her perfume left between the sheets - the only trace of her once she'd gone, so she is saying to find his way back to that real moment. Then the maid and the stone, she is saying not to do the job, but to find her instead, she has something to offer him that is worth more than the payday that waits for him.
But the line about the employer is the real crux, the 'detective', really a hitman, always delivers his bodies on time, but he is aware his employer is losing patience with him and is tired of making things go away etc.
And the real ending, well, there's only one way to retire a hitman who's getting to be more trouble than they are worth. Belinda was hired as part of that set up, but she had watched him, and decided there is more to be gained, one way or another, by working with him. She can't just tell him, or be seen with him, in case the employer finds out, so she keeps evading him, until the last moment, when she stops him before he can go inside, and she saves his life, his next hit was a set up. Her one last chase line refers to making a get away. What is never said, but I had in mind when writing, in case you are still wondering Belinda's role in all of this, the employer had hired her to replace our main character, but she decides she doesn't want the life he has, and that the same end might well await her, but if they team up, they could both give the employer the slip, and take on much bigger jobs, but well that would have taken a crazy amount of thinking about to figure out lol
Ohhhhhh.... Yeah, okay, that makes sense.
Nope, I did not pick up on her being hired to whack the reckless hitman, but that is a very good interpretation! Well done!
I like your character development and world-building. You accomplish a lot in a few words.
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