Deceit and love - day 39 of the Steemit school 100 day poetry challenge
Deceit and love
was it infatuation?
was it love at first sight
when he was near
everything was bright
smiles were exchanged
his presence, welcoming
it was enough to just see him
life had a new meaning
there was a lot in common
talks and walks were just above all
life put up a strange twist,
alas, he was hiding his fault
did he have any feeling for her
or was she just a pastime till his fiance appeared
Note
True love is indeed a blessing but many a time, young hearts are wounded because some people cheat. Be careful whom you like. Do a background check before you decide to get closer. History is full of such instances. Have you read the book - Sense and Sensibility?
The healing period
Hearts may be wounded
it will take time to heal
life is not ended
look ahead to the new
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This was a nice write may I make two tiny suggestions though
1- I feel that the flow of the whole piece gets snagged a bit by the second line of the second stanza.
While I understand that you wanted to flesh out the kind of excitement it felt to me that the piece would fair better if you left the description out-
also it might be good if you added a title to your writing notes or a spacer between them and the Poem <3
Thanks a lot. I will do as you suggested
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one should be careful but only if love could be done so thoughtfully.
Though I agree these days one need to be careful !
thanks dear, you are right.