Welcome to Steemit ! If I may suggest , You take a look at some the good paying out introduction posts , or in the trending section , and see how and why they did so good on their intro.posts . And do a new and better improved one , also be sure to use the ( #introduceyourself ) Tag as your first Tag !! And you will do much better ! Good Luck I hope this helps you ! 👍👍👍
wow .. good advice. very helpful. I will improve next post. Thank you very much @karenmckersie