Nice work Emmett! I was surprised at how easily Gathiar let the kids off the hook though. Thought it would be an epic battle for them to be able to leave that world. For the sequel!
I think a great next step would be editing this version that you posted to make it an easier read. But don't get me wrong, it was great work and I really enjoyed reading it!
Thanks I’m going to make a second book and if you want I can tell you a spoiler
No way, no spoiler!
Ok
And yes I will edit to make it a better read.