I read the first chapter to understand this one better.. and let me tell you that I would do better without reading it :D I can't stand description of 'people' who are missing something.. and the blood dripping out of the place where her eye used to be sounds too scary to me :D

The chapter two is more relaxed. It is still creepy but not as much as the first one :)

I can't wait to read Chapter 3 and see what will happen to him. I like how you described the last part with steam. I enjoy your creativity and situation in which you place your character. All is very well described and catchy. It makes you want to read more and more :)

Thank you for sharing! It is a great story!