heh... thanks for sharing on #pypt.
The change of style in writing was quite obvious there :D
One thing I'd say is: Make shorter sentences and use more punctuation. I found it a bit confusing to digest the statements in your own part as compared to @dreemsteem's intro. While your part did, for the lack of sentence structure, convey some of the action and emotion of the intense and frightening encounter, I did find it a bit hard to follow.
Yes, he knows he struggles with grammar so this is something we are working on. But for now, I'm just trying to get him writing more to build up his writing muscles hehehe
But he did a great job continuing the story, didn't he? 😊
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heh... yeah... weird stuff... i like the x-files :D
the lack of punctuation always made it feel like a stylistic choice there for the action-scene... also made it a tad hard to read, though!
Yeah, he will get there! :). Periods are a must.
He knows this! Hehehe and has started to add them. So it will be cool to see him growing, post after post!
Fun to look back after a year and see the changes that have made him a better writer!
I love seeing the changes in my style over the years.. literally just finished writing the sequel to Fireflies last night and I'm blown away at how good I think it came out!!!
Definitely can't say that.for my early stuff hehehe
But we all start somewhere! The passion has to be stoked and muscles worked.. just like any hobby. Hehe
Thanks for encouraging him though!!! I'm sure he will love to hear that it reminded you of x-files! That show used to make my hair stand up! 😂😂😂
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