Hi @calluna. Sry it took me so long to get back to you on this comment, I wrote this the day before steemfest and then... the madness of travel ensued ;-)

the way the imagery of her eyes weave through the story gives the eerie impression of her haunting him.

I'm glad you enjoyed the twist and I was careful to make the eyes of the ghost somewhat ambiguous in their gaze, like I was trying to make the reader think that she was haunting one of the others rather than Crow. I'm not sure how effective I was but I really wanted it to be a twist that doesn't become apparent until right at the end. Thanks for the feedback :-)